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my hometowm is a small town near yangs river. it lie in hu bei province .there is no electic in our town , and it was dark in the nights ,the people only siting by their own the gate of door , and listening someone told the stories .there countless stars in the sky . after 30 years , our town have make great changed , many people have bought cars , and have set up numous new buildings on our town