请作者增加词汇丰富度;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
I have a dog.He name is dodo.dodo is my family member.As my good friend,dodo play with me everyday.He is very fat but very cute.This year,dodo was nine.He palying with me when he was a small dog. Today,I go to School.Dodo is turning old when i growing up. I love my dodo.