请作者增加词汇丰富度;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
I have a good friend. She name is Lili. she is a beautiful girl. she has long black hair,two bid eyes. Every day,I go to school with her. We are a class,and she is tall at our class.At school,she will help me with my stydy. She will play with me when go back home and after school.