托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第51篇:住在乡下是否比城市好

作者句法知识掌握的不够好，可适当增加从句的使用；作者词汇基础扎实，拼写也很棒；文中衔接词丰富。

To response proposals which suggest opening the Arctic Refuge coastal plain to oil drilling, the former US president, Jimmy Carter wrote the article. By using reasoning, historical anecdote, and comparison, Jimmy supports his claim- the refuge should not be developed for industry-well. Jimmy Carter begins his passage by roughly describing the natural environment of the Arctic National Wildlife Refuge, which is the last truly great wildness in America. By doing this, Jimmy shows the audience the great wildness of the Refuge. In the paragraph 2, 3, the writer presents an attractive picture of the Refuge by stating his unforgettable experience in the region of the Arctic Refuge. This personal experience was used as a further evidence to strengthen his earlier claim that the Refuge is wild and magnificent. He successfully reinforces the fundamental of his argument- the Refuge should not be developed for industries- in the rest of the passage. After reading the first three paragraphs, Jimmy’s audience may hold a more supportive attitude towards his point of view that the Arctic National Wildlife Refuge, a place full of wonders, should exist without any industry developments. To further his argument, Jimmy presents historical anecdotes. It is mentioned in paragraph 5 that President Dwight, a republican, and Jimmy himself, a democratic president, both agreed to restrict development in the area of the Refuge. The author stress the significance of protecting the Refuge from any human activities, simultaneously established his authority based on these true anecdotes. In this case, the writer subtly made his article more believable. Furthermore, Jimmy revealed that the Refuge is important by telling that the protection is one of few agreements which had between two opposite communities. It is more likely for his audience to believe his own argument- since the Refuge is significant, and it should not be damaged by any industrial development. Finally, Jimmy supports his opinion by comparing data. The writer shows comparison in his article to lead his reader into deep thoughts. It is mentioned in paragraph 7 that only 1-2 percent of the oil that our country consumes each could be provided from the gigantic Refuge. By comparing the number “ 1-2 percent” to “more than 100 million acres”, which mentioned in paragraph 5 , audience may realize on their own that it is not worth to destroy the last truly great wildness just for something they can gain from using resources more wisely. In this case, Jimmy successfully achieved his goal- appeal us to protect the Refuge from being used improperly. Conclusively, the author uses reason, stating historical anecdotes, and comparing data, successfully support his point of view that the Arctic National Wildlife Refuge should not exist with industry. In addition, he also appeals people to help protect the great wildness.