应增加文中从句的使用;作者词汇量积累不错,一些高级词汇的使用比较灵活,有个别拼写错误;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
Nowdays,people has been accustomed to talk with others by computer in order to they could be easy to get messages and informations.Internet is convenient to us study and communication.Meanswhile,it also has brought troubles in life's interpersonal communication.Only we distinguish good or bad informations and grasp the essence of communication,can we enjoy life from complicated interpersonal communication. Different people have different awareness,there are two views about whether people should spend much more time contacting with other in Internet.On the one hand,some people think that Internet has became a essential part of life since computer is invented.Sometimes we can find out many problems change more complex owing to the deficiency of Internet in life.A person not only fastly accept messages that he want to,but also he can efficiently choose and delect useful message from a veriety of informations with computer.what'more,people can make more friends who come form everywhere arould the world by computer.On the other hand,the other disagrees the above dispute .they don't think that people truth with each other lack of the face to face communication.As long as a person learn how to idenical good or bad people,he can freedom to talk with other people. In my opinion,we can not deny Internrt is convenience to ouy life.We should cultiavate a capiblity about how to distinguish good or bad messages.we will have many friends if we learn the means of mkaing friends by computer.
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