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How to improve the school safety School safety is a matter of great importance. Great efforts should be made by the school to make sure the campus is safe. Firstly, nobody should be allowed to enter the school without permission. The school guard should check everyone entering the school strictly. Besides, the school security guards should wak around the campus from time to time so that some bad people be frightened away. More importantly, school safety education should be offered by the school. Students can be taught what to do when faced with danger. As for us students, we should keep safety in mind whatever we do. We shouldn't trust strangers or give away our personal information to them.