错误句子很少,但从句使用不熟练;文中较熟练地使用高级词汇,但词汇量仍需积累;文中基本没有过渡词和衔接词,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
As we all know,technology has been developing all along with the progress of the times.We can see that everybody has their own mobilephone.People have more ways to access the information. But,technology is a double-edged sword.At present,a saying 'A wealth of information creates a poverty of attention' triggers fierce debate.There is a very common phenomenon,many people pay more attention to their mobilephone than everthing.Some people even lose lief because of that.