可增加从句的使用量,注意个别的句子错误;结构良好,但是语言不流畅;希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累。
In China, i think KunMing is the most of beautiful cities. There has blue sky , colourful flowers, delicious food,lovely animals and friendly people. KunMing only have one season , it's spring, It looks like spring everyday ,we can fly kites in the grass ,i think it is really good.