拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;若注意一些句子错误,文章会更漂亮。
Last weekend,i am so lucky to have a chance to talk with a professor kelly lam,who works in physical studies .We talk about the theme of sharing with other people in the chinese students. And then I realized rather than 30 percents of students are not willing to share their feelings with other people whatever they're happy or not.Besides,we rarely talk about the importance of sharing in our traditional education. For those problems ,kelly gave his opinions to let us focus on sharing.As he said,in this time ,learning to share feelings is needed,and it will help us to grow better.