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My hometown My hometown is a beautiful and small town in northern china, it was changed as time past. At past time, there were many trees around the town, and some kinds of wild flowers wer everwhere,you could smell gragrant when the spring was coming. A small river flew in the front of town, there were a few of fishes that swimming in the river.The houses in the town were small and rough, the streets in the town were not only narrow but also little. the most people worked hard but made a little money.Nowadays, a lot of buildings and big shops have been set up. Many vehicles ran on the street.As industry developed,enviroment became wore and wore, the trees have been cut and fish has disappearded from river. We have to take a action for pollution.