单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;衔接成分很少出现,文章结构欠严谨;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
I have a good friend. She is a pretty girl. She has a long black hair, a pair of big eyes and a red mouth. She has a sweet voice. She is good at singing. we all like listening her songs. Meanwhile, she is a clever girl. She prefers reading, playing electrical games and sports.