题目:Computer and Man人与电脑
字数:150满分:100分
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recently ,the topic between human and computer has aroused a great concern.One thing the blessing of intelligent mechanization is more than its unhealthy effects on me . while others oppose it . As i see ,i should give my vote to the first . Here are some reasons to support my view . Firstly , it s obvious that computer has brought us the boom of information century ,only by it can we connect with our family ,our ethric,our friends in some seconds . secondly, i think PC area is a kind of world that involved vast great things we never contacted fore ,indeed ,no improvement and advance of computer,no changes of our life . in the foregoing sense ,we must thank for PC.