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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11308
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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

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复杂句使用不错,句法规范;作者词汇量积累不错,能较灵活地使用高级词汇;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。

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From the picture, we can see that people crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see. What make this phenomenon is that people are too depend on the cell phone to leave it. Nowadays, It is no doubt that the cell phone brings many benefits for us. However, If we overuse it, it will lead to many bad consequences. Firstly, the cell phone contains radiation which hurts people's body. Some people die of cancer because of radiation from the cell phone. Secondly, the cell phone distracts our attention about discovering the beauty of life. People pay their attention on the cell phone and they do not go out. Thirdly, when people spend too much time on their cellphone, they do not have encough chances to communicate with their parents and their friends. There is no denying that the cell phone have brought us considerable convenient. Nonetheless, we should be aware of negative effects that cell phones have brought to us.

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