作者词汇基础不错,还请增加高级词汇的使用;作者句法知识扎实,但文中从句数量稍显不足;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
Dear Tom, How is everything going? I am writing to you to ask you do me a favor,I am wondering that whether you can help me sell some Chinese knots which I made on my own with silk,cloth and some other materials. Besides,these knots are about 4 inches long and 2 inches broad. The color is red and I promise that all of these knots are beautiful. By the way, I want you to sell them at 12 dollars each, which is not too expensive. The Chinese knot is typical of friendship.love and good luck,which can be send to others as gifts. If the customers are keen on knowing more about the Chinese knots,please ask them to write to me. I will be very grateful that if you can do me the favor. Please rely me as soon as possible. Yous, Lihua