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Currently, parents always arrange everything for their children.The reason is that they think what they do is good for their children.Nevertheless, the children become dependent and lack the ability to face their lives by themselves, thus I hold the point that parents should try their best to help their children to be independent. The ways to help children to be independent are as follows.Firstly, parents must to change their thoughts.Only by letting children try to do something by themselves can help them to cultivate a good habit. Secondly, parents should give their children the freedom to make choices for themselves. If they make a wrong choice, parents should teach them carefully.Last but not least,when children facce difficulty,parents shouldn't immediately give their hands to their children and give them some time to think how to deal with it. The quality of indespendence is dispensable for a person.Only an independent individual can live a meaningful life.