句式变化多样,句法方面做的很棒;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;文章词汇表达丰富,高级词汇使用较丰富,但拼写检查要重视。
Every year, a number of teenagers are admitted to universities. Most teenagers never worry about their tuition for the reason that their parents support them all the time.Nevertheless, some parents can't afford their children tuition, because they are poor.How can them get encough money to pay the tuition? In fact, there are many ways to deal with the problem.First, students can get financial assistance from their relatives, who is rich. Second, when they are free, they can do part time jobs to earn money. Last but not least, what a popular way is that students can get loan from banks. Amony the three ways, I think the second way is most sutiable for me.I hold the point that doing a part time job not only can earn money, but also can make me learn more about job market.
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