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I have many friends,but one of the best with me.Our friendship for over 7 years.I believe we are the most of known each other.she has long hair ,big eyes and perfect figure.She is very smart and loves clean .She is good at singing, we all think that her voice is very nice. But she is a little shy, don't like to sing in a public occasion.Many people are willing to make friends,because most of the time a good friend will try to settle disputes between partie before them aloofness.as we all know ,things occur between friends,like jealovsy,aloofness,is not fresh.However, our friendship has such as the first good, never because of a misunderstanding and joh.i am so happy that i have a close friend.