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Good morning, everyone. I'm glad to have the chance to introduce my beloved hometown to you. In the northwest of GuiZhou province,laying a lovely city called BiJie. It's not only the city where I was born, but also the only place I've never been able to leave 2 years ago, I moved from there to ZunYi to begin my senior high school life.the day I left that I felt as a fish out of water. East or west, home is the best. Wherever I go, I just can't forget the delicious food called LiangGao in my hometown but called LiangFen in ZunYi. Boiling it with SuanCai, bean sprout and special oil peppers is an unique way in my hometown. Maybe you are thinking, What? Boil? and suancai?It must be a darkness food!Well, I am sure you won't have any problem falling in love with it when you smell it in person. What's more, my hometown is famous for Baili Azaleas where is known to everyone. But, today I want to introduce another marvelous place, JiuCai Plain. You can take a cable car to get the top of the mountain that is full of purple leek flowers that looks like a small Provence France. Its altitude is 2900 meters so it's the ridge of roof of GuiZhou. Smelling the scent of JiuCai flower,touching the breeze, caching the fine views, emptying your mind, you will think the nature has special power to make life and the world so wonderful. Around the JiuCai plain, forming a special culture called A Xi Li Xi by Yi people. The Torch Festival is the most important event to them. If you go to my hometown BiJie, you can't miss them. Maybe someday I will have to leave this city ,but no matter where I would go I will never forget this city, its people, its trees and its sunrise. Yes, everything that it gave me could be given by other places, but my love won't be changed, because it's my hometown. Thanks for your patient listening. Thank you.