2015年高考作文优秀范文：登山活动

句法很棒，若适当增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩；词汇表达灵活多样请继续保持，高级词汇的使用还有很大提升空间；上下文衔接不流畅，文章结构不严谨。

Ladies and Getenlmen, we will share a story of Climbing Mountain which was organized by Xing Guang High School. The classmates climbed the Daqing Mountain on 10th April. It was so active for all of the students at the beginning of Climbing Mountain. There were many lively memories in this journey. Tired as everyone was, they gave support to each other. Individuals in increasing number climbed the Mountain in the course of the end. It is so necessary that schools should hold some activities to keep students' fit. I deem that students can also learn certain knoledge which can not initiated in the class.