2015年高考作文优秀范文：登山活动

句法很棒，若适当增加一些从句的使用，文章会取得更好的成绩；用词灵活多样，也能较灵活地使用一些高级词汇；恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒。

Ladies and Getenlmen, we will share a story of Climbing Mountain which was organized by Xing Guang High School. The classmates climbed the Daqing Mountain on 10th April. There were many memories in this journey. It was so active for all of the students at the beginning of Climbing Mountain. Tired as everyone was, they gave support to each other in the end. Thus, individuals in increasing number climbed the Mountain in the end. It is so necessary that schools should hold quite a few activities to keep students' fit. I deem that students can also gain some knowledge which may not initiated in class.