文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;行为稍欠流畅,过渡词用的还可以;作者应适量增加从句的使用量。
in recent years , with the hot of the study of English, many students put much attention to study english for the cet-4 and cet-6.now, in many students heart, it is much important to study english and the study of chinese was ignored. the reason for this phenomena is due to the society much emphasis on the importance of english . and it it few voice was pointed that chinese are also very important for us . as a excellent student, it is not only good at english , but also the chinese. so that more and more students are weak at chinese , and they can not have a great article to show and the whole country would in trouble with this unnormal matters. as for me , i would pay more intention to study of chinese .however, chinese is our the first language, if the first language we can not say well , how to learn other language ?and then , besides to learn chinese well , i will study english as well.