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2013年12月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):手机

发布时间:2014-06-09 15:38浏览次数:11359
要求:

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in people's life and then explain the consequences of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.

用户的作文(系统评分71.0分
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拼写做的很棒,高级词汇可适量增加;从句使用量不足,应增加从句和复合句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错。

用户练习作文:

There is no denying the face that mobile phone provide convenience greatly in our daily life.we make all kind of things by mobile phone no matter where are you,even in the street which show by the above picture.However,we can't depend too much on cell phones.Too much water drowned the miller. As the above photo show,overuse the mobile will brought the bad influence.For one,mobile let us keep in touch.keep our relationship,but on the contrary,we will lose the chance to face-to-face others,pay less attention to surroundings,which will let us lose the ability of communication.For another,overuse the mobile is harmful of our health,

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