作者词汇量积累很好,高级词汇积累要重视;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;建议增加衔接词和过渡词的使用。
Lily is one of my best friends. She was born in the AnHui and she is thirty two years old. At present she is working for a furniture factory. Lily like her work very much. She gets up at six o'clock everyday and goes to work by bus. She is very responsible for her work and she can finish work in time so that her manager often approve her views very well . Lily has lovely and naive personality. She is a kind and virtuous person. Everybody likes her very much and she gets on with people easily.