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With the development of people living condition, More and more people are buying a car as their daily transportation. honestly speaking, Automobile industry takes a lot of conveniences for people,and the same time, there are plent of disadvantages which peole can not predict. because of the cars, our traval becomes convenient,fast and comfortable.Automobile industry upgrade our industry style.it improves people living condition and economy development.It realizes the dream that people want to dream. But we also have to face all kinds of problems that automobile lead to.at first, the air pollution is the most important problem.secoundly,many people lost their lives or hurt themselves in the traffic accident.Thirdly, people are anxious for the traffic, at last, there are not enough place to park the cars.Fortunately people pay more attention for these problems to look for the measures to solve them.