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How your personal quality is most important in society to look forward to being successful. As far as I know, the university is like a little size of the society and this place will train yourself to improve to get along with anyone which maybe is a student or friend. All we have to do is how long it take to enhance your personal quality. So why would I emphasize that your personal quality is more important than studying? At first, there is no denying that when you graduate from school, most people particularly pay attention on your performance of the school including studying grade and human relationship. Second, you enter new company after several days, your boss will focus on your behavior that is interactive with your colleague and effective working. Finally, both skill of them you have would have opportunities to move up the level of your job.