可适当增加几条从句;文中词汇表达比较丰富,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
When I was in junior high school, I like my new English teacher. She is very excellent and knowlegeable. Becuse she is good at English,so she has taken part in English speech competition when she was during university,and achieved good the result. I decided to learn from her how to improve learning method. My teacher likes speaking English with us in the class and she said that she hoped students speak and practice more.