行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;能够使用一些简单的从句;作者平时练习中应扩充词汇量,注意几处拼写错误。
Create a Green Campus Long long ago,our homeland was very beautiful and clean.With the technology's development and life's improve,people more and more not attention the green nalture and haven't product it.Today,not only nalture is very important but also our campus should be highlighted.So,create a green campus is our's bility. Green campus not only indicate the green environment,it also present our's moral. School can provide us a comfortable environment to study,it has many teachers,many students,also has many beautiful views.As a students,we must product it! In order to create a green campus,i think we should do it as follows:Firstly,we can't catch the trees,flowers and can't draw on walls.Secondly,we can help the other students clean the floors,windows,chairs...Finally,we must ask ourselves can not throw the cabages or junk food everywhere.I think if we require ourselves to be a good citizien,our homeland will become more and more beautiful.