文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写还要加强;文中从句使用不丰富;行文流畅,但衔接词比较少。
In my opinion ,the beautiful city in China is Guangzhou. Guangzhou is a famous city in China .It has many beautiful place and it have international place .The 2011 Asian Games was hold on Guanghou .The particalers and the visiters from all over the world were go to Guangzhou for look the games .The opening ceremony was hold on Guangzhou Tianhe .Tianhe is the international place ,it have many high building and Guangzhou Tower .The Guangzhou Tower is tall and thin ,and have many resturants and have a ferris wheel .Many visiter are go to see the tower ,and they will go to the top of the tower to see the view. I'm soppose the foreign friend to go to Guangzhou ,and have fun.