词汇表达不够丰富,要增加学术词汇的使用;采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;能够使用一些简单的从句;请注意分段。
due attention should be given to the study of Chinese nowadays it is become a popular phenomenon that more and more students ignore the study of Chinese,especially the university students. there are three reasons which cause that.Firstly,many students enter the university study their major and they think the Chinese is not useful,study that would cost their time and it would not be use in the future.secondly some students said they were born the China and they study the Chinese every day.they do not spend