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Smartphone Addiction With the function of mobilephone's increase, there are more and more teenagers who indulge in phone which also makes them become the people who have smartphone addiction. As far as I'm concerned, it is not a foolproof question to answer whether it is right or not. Whereas, when children use mobilephone as their game machine or toy instead of studying, I 'm strongly objecting to it. At the beginning, phone is created just to communicate with others. Therefore, we should take some measures to make it right. For one thing, responsibility should be taken by parents to limit the time that children spend on smartphone. It is transparently obvious that teenagers spend much time on it so that they can hardly have time on their studies. For another thing, teenagers themselves should be aware of worse consequence if they still are addicted to it. What's more, our motherland will depend on teenager which also means they will play an indispensable role in the next decade.