Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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Along with the advance of the society,people has diffrent salary has become a hot tapic. According to the Bureau of Labor Statistics,people has diffrent degree and diffrent salary.First,the statistics show to us the unemployment average rate is seven point six percent,and it above the usually level.Second,it show to us the median weekly average earnings is 797,and it lower than the usually level.there are some reason made the phnomenon: first,the society is a new technogoly area that need a lot of people who has a high konwledge;second,the company perfer to employment the undergratetude,because they think the undergratetude could made the high profit to the company. As far as i concerned,the gorverment should take some measures to change the phnomenon.such as help some people who has a low degree to get the konwledge,let they have fair to get some job.we should take care of the salary people.