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My Views on Online Shopping Currently, with the growing popularity on online shopping, our lives have been considerably changed, so that more and more people shopping online rather than in reality. As far as I am concerned, on the one hand, shopping online is convenient for us, because we will not go far from home to buy what we want. On the other hand, it is so many choices in the internet that we can choose something we really want. However, online shopping also have some bad sides. For example, we can not see or touch the item what we interesting and we do not know whether the seller cheat us. In my opinion, online shopping is a widespread phenomenon. Therefore, we should learn to distinguish truth from falsehood, when buying items.