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My Dream Hi Everyone have their own dream.No mater who want to be a teacher, be a doctor or be an enjineer. They all a symbol of our life . My dream is be a teacher who is good at math, physics and chemistry. The mean rean is that I like then. And I think make students to be better is a symbol of honour. I'll work hard from now on and get good grades in my study. I won't give up my dream.I think it will come true soon.