作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,高级词汇使用过少;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;建议加强过渡词和衔接词的积累,文章结构不严谨。
My new teacher is a science teacher. He’s very strong. He has a big mouth, two big ears, two big eyes and a medium nose. He often wears a new black shirt and a pair of brown pants, with two big shoes. My science teacher is extremely kind. what's more he is very smart, isn’t he? Today, we will have science class. All of us are happy to attend the class. Because he is so funny. Who is he? He’s Mr. Zhou.