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Dear Jellff: I an so happy heard you will vivst my hometown,Most and differently place in China,There are certainly many scenic spots in Hunan,so let's me show the most interesting place with you! Changsha is the provincial capital of Hunan,it is my stay city now.First ,The Orange head is one of Changsha's most visited sights. Because the statue of Mao Zedong is here,he is the great man in China is likely the first American president George Washington. Second,Yuelu is the famous place near the Orange head,it Include the fogger,the flower,the cultuer and so on,we can face to face chat with climbing the mountain ,The most inportent is the Fiery palace it brings together all the good food in Hunan,you must lik it.and other place waiting you come here let's me show you. Best wishes! yours friend Dan.