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In accordance with what is detailedly demonstrated in the curve diagram,we can observe distinctly that some remarkable changes have taken place in terms of the sales of cars in the past several years.In the original years,the number remained at a relatively stable state,approximate 200,000 annually.But it went up sharply from 1994 to 1996,reaching 900,000 in 1996.From then on,the sales continued to reduce. It is no difficulty for me to put forward some factors responsible for these changes.On the one hand,China's reform and opening up policy enjoyed great success in the 1990s and a large number of people earned plenty of money.In the light of a recent official report,roughly 80% folks who dared to eat the crabs in the golden age have created their own business and made big money.On the other hand,it is with increasingly high income,more and more citizens incline to seek better quality of life including a luxurious car.Finally,the prosperity of automobile industry has offered a diverse of optional choices for the obsession of cars. Taking into account what has been discussed so far,these changes signify the improvement of civilians'living standards.I am certain this trend will continue in the forthcoming years.
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