作者句法知识扎实,可适当增加从句的使用;文中词汇表达比较丰富,但高级词汇的积累还有很大的空间;文章采用了适当的过渡词和衔接词,结构比较严谨。
friendship, a kind of relationship between you and me , woman and man, even old and younger, one of the attractive magical things in the world, catchs more and more attentions by all kinds of people. I believe that the friendship is my presure asset and I will demonstrate the significant of it using my own behaviour. Hands given me when I stands in the swirl, supporting with me when I feel disappointed, smile and happiness with me when I am happy.