句法方面做得很棒,但是从句不多;单词拼写做得很好,请注意积累词汇量;文中衔接词丰富。
Mr Brown has a big and old clock in his sitting room. This clock is from his grandpa when he worked at east USA. Mr Brown loved his grandpa very much, so he hung the clock on the wall at sitting room when his grandpa died. The clock made of red wood, and has some Crackle on it, so it looks like that a black clock. The clock on time more than although it is very old.