增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中词汇表达较为丰富,但高级词汇比较少,单词拼写要也加强;层次不够清晰,文中很少使用衔接词。
From: wanghaiyang@hotmail.com Date: 13:00 23th. Dec. 2008 To: sales-department@hotmail.com Dear Mr. Johnson We have received numbers of 3000 products on 22th. Dce, but according to our signing of the No.35 order, the figer was 3500 , other 500 we have not received untill now. Please check your product list, and reply as soon as possible. Wang Haiyang