小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

文中过渡词和衔接词使用较少；从句数量不足，可适当增加从句和复杂句的使用；词汇表达较灵活准确，高级词汇使用过少，另外注意文中个别的拼写错误。

A picture on my desk about Jim's family climbed a mountain. Stand in the front row who Jim and Susana is, they mother and father stand behind of them, and this is Aric and Marie. Aric was a doctor for children worked in the Saint Mary Hospital. Marie was a science teacher at middle shool. Jim and Susana were students both, and they had studied in the shool where they mother teaches. I love they , by the way Jim is me.