句式变化多样,句法方面做的很棒;作者要注意增加使用高级词汇,单词拼写做的挺好;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错。
The summer holidays had finished at tow day ago. Think about it now, this is a busy and happy holiday. In the first month, i had experienced country life where in my grandparent's home. Their house where it was nearby a lake and it is called Zhanghe. In those time, I had been fishing by the lake everyday in the morning and i would go back when the sun rises to the middle of the sky. After lunch, I often with more than children what we climbed the trees near by a road or played football in a big grassland. This grassland although is not as good as the normal football ground, but i feel happier more than. A country although not has tall buildling, smooth road, and many cars, but it has good air not in the city. If you come here, you will feel sweet of the air.