拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;从句比重偏低,有几处句子错误;衔接成分太少,文章结构欠佳。
In the picture, today.i am very happy,because i visit my grandmother and grandfather at five o'clock pm .and eat more delicious food at there,the grandmother and grandfather say;i hope you could study hard,happy everyday.finally,i hope you will successful in the future. In short, let's say goodbye to crossing the road in a Chinese way and live a safer and happier life.