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Notice On 20th June, 2010 we will visist qinglong town farm. The visist road map: The farm GM will have a brief introduction the farm at farm office on 8:30 Am. Then visist the farm on 9:30 Am. on 10:30 Am we will visist the facter of the farm and on 11:30 going to farmer，s home have lunch. Please who will going together at liabrary before 6:30 Am, the bus will going pantuary at 6:40.
