文中用词稍显贫乏;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错。
I have a good friend. Her name is Lily. She is a beautiful girl. We know each other at primary school. When I first saw her, I feel she is nice and we will be good friend. Until now, I know my feeling is right. We not only living nearly,and also having same hobbies, same values and same feelings. I hope we be friend forever.