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参考词汇：
chat v. 聊天meaningful adj. 有意义的 cheer up 使...快乐
作文开头：
Fellow students, we'll pay a visit to the Old People's House this Sunday morning.
文中词汇使用较丰富，但高级词汇使用太少；作者应增加从句的使用；衔接成分偏少。
Fellow students,we will pay a visit to the old people's house this Sunday morning.We will take a bus and arrive here.First,we are going to giving presents to old person, Second,we will clean up and made up rooms.Third we will play dancing and singing,tell stories and chat with old people we will bring happiness to them.this is an interesting activities we are hoping every one joined it. I think this activities are very interesting ,it brings cheer up old man,It is a intertesting activities
