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Dear Peter I’m thrilled to know that you are going to visit my hometown and I can’t wait to see you again. I still miss everything that happened in your city, and your parents and you were very kind to me. I will try my best this time to make you stay an enjoyable and memorable time. My hometown, Changsha, the capital of Hunan province, is best known as the star city of its well developed entertainment industry and tourism. Yuelu Mountain is the first place that I want to introduce to you. Firstly, in the foot of Yuelu Mountain is Yuelu Acadmay. It has an exceedingly long history and its architecture is characteristic of Song Dynasty. Then, after a half hour, we will visit the Bird Forest. There are varies rare birds there, and they can sing, perform, and interact with us. After two hours, we will arrive at the Peak, Baiyun Summit. The scenery there is spectacular and we will have a panorama of the whole city. I bet you must be so exciting for this trip and Yuelu Mountain is waiting for us to explore. Now you have to do is packing up and go. I assure you this trip will be a great fun. If you have any question or suggestion, let me know. Your sincerely Kimi
