托福Toefl作文模拟题附范文 第49篇:坚持不懈是否能让人变得更加强壮

语句间的衔接成分用得不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；从句使用很不错，再接再厉；作者高级词汇量积累不足，部分单词有拼写错误。

some people say that the perseverance can make people stronger than they did yesterday.in my opinion,i think it's so right,we should be perseverance in doing anything,that we will maybe success someday furthuer,and there are lot of statements supporting my point. when we were very young person,we didn't know what the world look like and we just what we could do in our childhood is all the homeworks,some people think,studying in school just wasted our time and we couldn't get anything through learning in school,so many of us didn't believe we can change ourselves by learning and studying,so they became the worker ,famer,or anyone in general.i just want to say that just because they didn't try their best to do that.if they can try again and again ,harder and harder,when they met chanllenge,i bet that most of them could be sucesse. and now,as a adult,when we faced our jobs,most of us thought that's very difficult for themselves,and they could barely walk through it,but for me,28-years-old person,i believe when i try my best to work filled in passion and mession,we could finally sucess. so i think perseverance can make people stronger