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2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

发布时间:2013-05-17 11:41浏览次数:9784
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题目 On Excessive Packaging
要求
1.目前许多商品存在过度包装的现象
2.出现这一现象的原因
3.我对这一现象的看法和建议
字数:120满分:100分
用户的作文(系统评分81.5分
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拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。

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Nowadays most of the products are on excessive packaging and this phenomenon contribute to a heated discussion. All the excessive packaging products are looks exquisite and has a high price.Actually,the excessive packaging products price is not equal to its value.It is commonly believed that in one hand the reason why those products has the market is the people's vain.They need something as a gift to their friends,boss and relatives.So they are satisfied with the products which on excessive packaging.It is exquisite and expensive that can show their respect to the people who get the gift.In other hand,if the merchant want to get more profits,they must draw the customer's attention and the package must be delicate.So they are spending more times focusing on the package and ignored the products equality. As far as I concerned,with the remarkable improvement of people's life standard,many ads and product makes our eyes confused. But Never judge people by their appearance. So is products.The merchant should focus on produts equality.because a good reputation is more value than a packaging product.And every one should know the most expensive could not be the best.People should retrain the behavior of comparison.

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