语句间的衔接成分用得不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;作者句法知识掌握的不够好,可适当增加从句的使用;作者词汇基础不错,在高级词汇的积累上还要再接再厉。
The Internet is developing more and more quickly nowadays not only in person's daily work but also on the whole world. Most of us are linked by the Internet, such as writing e-mails to your good friends, chatting with your friends on QQ even though buying things through the Internet. I believe that most of persons agree that Internet plays an import part in our life. It gives us a lot of convenience and helps us a lot. However,on the one hand, the Internet is a good tool which can make our life easier and more interesting, on the other hand, it also causes some bad effects on our everyday routines, such as on interpersonal communication. For that more and more person relays on communicate on the Internet without meeting with each other. As far as I am concerned, the Internet is a virtual thing after all, we still need to maintain our relationship by meeting with friends, shopping, chat face to face or travelling together, etc. Internet can not replace feelings like happy, sad or angry that we produce. To sum up, the Internet can make our life more excellent and easier, decreasing a large amount of troubles, but it is still a possibility for us to keep in touch with our friends, families, classmates and so on.
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