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MY FAVORITE SPORT hello,everybody.i am a middle school student ,and l am so intereted in playing soccer ,but why?that becaue by an accident chance .one day i picked up a soccer when i was walking to home .then i play it with my friends so that i faii in love it . afterwards i always train and competetion with classmates ,znd my favorite soccer start is BELK hamo my laegest wish is being a professionai fottball player so how about you?whats your favorite sport?